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The article was promoted by Laser brain via FACBot (talk) 25 July 2019 [1].
Mercury Seven[edit]
This article is about the Mercury Seven astronauts, who were selected in 1959. As late as 1998, they were the most famous astronauts, but they have been eclipsed in recent years by Neil Armstrong and Buzz Aldrin. Still, they include the first American in in space, the first in orbit, the first to fly Mercury, Gemini and Apollo missions, and the first to hit a golf ball on the Moon. One even flew on the space shuttle, nearly forty years after being selected as an astronaut. This article was previously nominated as a Featured List, but was not promoted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:19, 11 June 2019 (UTC)
Support: I have only trivialities to mention, and none that stop a support at this point:
- "group of seven astronauts for Project Mercury announced" - reads really strangely. Perhaps "a group of seven pilots selected to crew the Project Mercury space capsules" or something to that effect?
- "and went on to become a U.S. senator" - I'm not sure this is a detail for the lede, and it splits out the next statement, which definitely is.
- "which carried Laika, a Soviet space dog" - well, really, just a dog. Perhaps "the first of several dogs launched by the Soviets"
- "the two agencies that should have been supporting it, NACA" - just previous to this it is suggested NACA is already merged. Perhaps some re-arrangement would be useful in this para? Or some additional dates like the formation or funding of MISS?
- "desirable brand.[77] The Mercury astronauts" - para break?
- "o flew first.[20][83] In August 1959" - maybe here too?
- "As additional groups of astronauts" - I think a section break here would be useful
- "privileges" basis.[85] The Mercury" - para here
- "time to it.[88] Training was always" - and here.
That's it! Easy to read, and very informative and entertaining. A fantastic article! Maury Markowitz (talk) 17:34, 12 June 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you. The article is an unusual one. It was intended as a list, but there was a lot to say about them as a group. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:29, 12 June 2019 (UTC)
Sources review[edit]
- No spotchecks carried out
- Links to sources are all working, per the external links checker tool
- Formats:
- Carpenter & Stoever 2003: publisher location missing
- O'Leary 1971: publisher and location missing
- Quality and reliability: The sources appear comprehensive, and of the standards of quality and reliability required by the FA criteria.
Brianboulton (talk) 18:39, 17 June 2019 (UTC)
Comments by Kees08[edit]
Adding this so I do not forget to review. Kees08 (Talk) 07:28, 18 June 2019 (UTC) The U.S. Astronaut Hall of Fame's inaugural class was the Mercury Seven. I suppose they had an advantage, since the hall of fame was created by the Mercury 7 Foundation. Would be good if we could add whatever we can find on the Mercury 7 foundation, and add in information on the U.S. Astronaut Hall of Fame (the first class, has a lot of Mercury 7 memorabilia, etc). I just added a couple citations to Grissom's article in case you want to copy/paste them in here. Kees08 (Talk) 07:20, 25 June 2019 (UTC)
- It might be a precursor to the Astronaut Scholarship Foundation, I am not sure. Kees08 (Talk) 07:35, 25 June 2019 (UTC)
- Change manned to crewed per GNL policy (when appropriate, obviously)
- Any way to avoid consecutive 'which's?
MISS encountered technical challenges, which caused funding difficulties, which in turn created conflicts with the two agencies that should have been supporting it, NACA and the Advanced Research Projects Agency (ARPA).
- Which came first, the term cosmonaut or astronaut? And is there any reason to insert information into the article about the cosmonaut term?
- Three-person?
A three-man panel
Reviewed down to selection process. Still could use something on the US Astronaut Hall of Fame I think. Thanks for the great additions about the foundation. Kees08 (Talk) 07:02, 2 July 2019 (UTC)
- Maybe change
service records of graduates of test pilot schools
toservice records of test pilot school graduates
- You could link Marine Corps earlier
- Wasn't the whole selection process secret or top secret? I thought they had to check into a hotel under a pseudonym. Might be misremembering, not sure it is worth inclusion regardless.
- You're remembering the Next Nine, who checked into the Rice Hotel as "Max Peck". Nobody read my articles.
- Regarding their welcome, were no Army candidates in that first group?
- Don't think this should be capitalized:
to the Space Program
- I think US spelling is emphasized
emphasised
- Corrected.
Comments Support by Coffeeandcrumbs[edit]
I am going to try hard to find fault where there is likely almost none. These are mostly nitpicking.
- "USAF agreed to transfer responsibility" is unnecessarily verbose and seems strange (as if they could refuse). Unless you meant "decided", I would change the sentence to "NASA was established on October 1, 1958, and the USAF transferred responsibility for MISS to the new agency." (This also gets around the PROSELINE.) Unless there is some back story I am missing, the USAF obeying orders from the president is not notable as agreeing.
- There's a lot of back story here, mostly not relevant to this article. For a start, in the United States, the President doesn't have that sort of authority. A lot of negotiation was involved. If you're interested, I recommend Rosholt, Robert L. (1969). An Administrative History of NASA, 1958-1963 (PDF). NASA Historical Series. Washington, D.C.: NASA. OCLC 643260325. SP-4101. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:44, 19 July 2019 (UTC)
- I think "Glenn and Carpenter did not meet all of their schools' degree requirements" should be followed by a colon or semicolon, follow by a sentence or two, instead of the including the completion of Glenn's senior year which broke my reading.
- "and second bachelor's degree" to "and a second bachelor's degree
- "on the eve". Slayton's article says "two months prior to the launch of [ Mercury-Atlas 7 ]". I think the latter is better.
- Slayton's photo seems out of place. Can a portrait from the same period be located? No worries if not.
- There should have been one in the series with the others, but it isn't on Commons. Maybe Kees08 can locate one. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:44, 19 July 2019 (UTC)
- Found a photo. How does it look? Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:04, 19 July 2019 (UTC)
- I did a quick restoration and removed the autograph: File:Deke Slayton (c. 1960).jpg. Tell me if you hate the colors. I can try again
- Found a photo. How does it look? Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:04, 19 July 2019 (UTC)
- There should have been one in the series with the others, but it isn't on Commons. Maybe Kees08 can locate one. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 00:44, 19 July 2019 (UTC)
- I would crop the photo captioned "The four surviving Mercury 7..."
- Ref #96 — Says "p. 165" but the chapter link in Warren-Findley (1998) points to page 166 in the source. Remove
#Chapt7-5
from the URL. If you want both pages, you can also remove#Chapt7-5
and change to "pp. 165-66". - Ref #94 — Source is actually on p. 2 of the "Tempo" section if there is any way to indicate that in your own citation style.
- Ref #93 — Change "National Aeronautics and Space Administration" to "NASA" consistent with other refs and consider adding
|website=The 40th Anniversary of the Mercury Seven
as seen here, which is the title of the former website (book?). For Shepard, the author's name, Tara Gray, is missing. - Ref #92 — "About ASF ASF". Only 1 ASF in the title. Also please archive; this source will not stay the same forever.
- Ref #3 — "p." not "pp."
- Carpenter et al. (2010) — Remove "Originally published " to be consistent with style at Cunningham (2009). Or vice versa.
- Compton (1998) — Add
|location=Washington, D.C.
for consistency - Logsdon & Launius (2008) — Same as Compton — also Eppley (1963) if you like
- I am not seeing Alt text for File:Mercury Seven astronauts with aircraft.jpg, File:Mercury Seven.jpg, File:LC 14 Memorial Sign 2.jpg, File:LC-14 Mercury 7 (cropped).jpg, and "The four surviving Mercury 7... " photo mentioned above
- Not required for FAC, but I'll see what I can do...
--- Coffeeandcrumbs 23:47, 18 July 2019 (UTC)
Coordinator notes[edit]
I've added this to the Urgents list in hopes of attracting some additional attention. If not, unfortunately it will need to be archived soon for lack of review. --Laser brain (talk) 11:23, 18 July 2019 (UTC)
Support by Randy Kryn[edit]
I added a See also for the two Mercury program chimpanzees, and updated one fact, but besides that I could find little to criticize in this already fine and important article. With the improvements that have been discussed and worked on in this nomination, featuring this one during the recent and ongoing focus on historical space missions seems appropriate. Randy Kryn (talk) 12:06, 19 July 2019 (UTC)
Support Comments by JennyOz[edit]
- "Project Mercury. The name was publicly announced by Glennan on December 17" but then "The STG next had to decide on a name for the people who would fly into space. A brainstorming session was held on December 1, 1958" - not chronological so maybe drop "next"?
- "aeronaut" - maybe add (air traveller)
- "with annual salary of" an? or salaries?
- "Robert B. Voas" - add he a psychologist
- "NASA officials then briefed them" - 'briefed the chiefs' seeing para started with candidates
- "Edward Givens, who was selected with the fifth group in 1965" - 1966?
- "John L. Whitehead Jr.,[34] did so only in January 1958" - what is the "only" emphasising? Not yet had the 1500 hrs?
- Possibly, but I don't have proof. It is more likely that he was in the third group due to having only recently graduated, and therefore not having much test pilot experience. Again, I don't proof. It is highly unlikely that NASA management would have accepted him. In researching the article, I found that an African American graduated in 1958, 1960, 1963, 1972, 1977 and 1984, so only six had graduated in thirty years. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:52, 21 July 2019 (UTC)
- "Glenn was at the maximum weight" - weight is not mentioned in the selection criteria list
- "NASA introduced the astronauts in Washington, DC on April 9" - DC needs comma
- table - does career column need to be sortable?
- "Glen flew in space on Mercury-Atlas 6" - double n
- "becoming the first person fly in space twice" - to
- "co-anchor for the broadcasts of the Apollo Moon landing missions" - full stop
- "Mercury-Atlas 10, but it was cancelled" - canceled
- slayton's refs [67][49][68][69] - order
- "Cooper travelled to McGhee" - traveled
- "private lives, homes, and families.[83][27]" - ref order
- "on a "rank has it privileges" basis" - its?
- "President Kennedy presented" wlink?
- "is buried beneath the monument to be opened in 2464." - needs comma after monument
- the only info I would suggest adding is maybe a sentence on the wives? Their role in supporting their husbands, NASA's image and each other with their 'club' was rather important. (I'm not suggesting using that link.)
Thanks, JennyOz (talk) 15:15, 21 July 2019 (UTC)
Image review[edit]
- The source link for File:Gordon Cooper 2.jpg needs tweaking.
- The source link for File:Schirra walter 3.jpg is dead.
- In the source for File:Donald Slayton portrait.png could you give the page number - 13.
- Two images lack alt text.
- "Portrait" just barely meets MOS:ALT (although 'Color photograph' may be better); "studio portrait" doesn't. Could there be a brief description please.
- See Wikipedia_talk:Manual_of_Style/Accessibility/Alternative_text_for_images#Alt_text_for_astronaut_group_articles. A teeny-tiny consensus, but it was discussed at least. Does that change your mind at all? Kees08 (Talk) 14:47, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- 'Fraid not. It needs to meet the MoS. Just the group photo, (And the two with no alt text.) Gog the Mild (talk) 15:54, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- How does it not meet the MOS? Adding that it is color or not would not help a visually impaired user understand the function of the photograph. Describing how the astronauts look (if that is what you are suggesting) is not what alt text is for. Kees08 (Talk) 17:28, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- I disagree. Stick "|alt=a color photograph of four formally dressed elderly men" in and IMO its MoS compliant. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:35, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- Are we talking about the same thing? I am referring to the images in the table. Kees08 (Talk) 17:53, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- The images in the table are acceptable with "portrait", although, as I said above, barely; I would have preferred 'Color photograph of John Doe', etc; but, for clarity, I do not feel that this is a requirement for FAC. The alt text for the final group photo needs tweaking; and the two images without alt text need it adding; the first of these you could simply add "|alt=refer to caption", as the existing caption text is explanatory. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:18, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- Are we talking about the same thing? I am referring to the images in the table. Kees08 (Talk) 17:53, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- I disagree. Stick "|alt=a color photograph of four formally dressed elderly men" in and IMO its MoS compliant. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:35, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- How does it not meet the MOS? Adding that it is color or not would not help a visually impaired user understand the function of the photograph. Describing how the astronauts look (if that is what you are suggesting) is not what alt text is for. Kees08 (Talk) 17:28, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- 'Fraid not. It needs to meet the MoS. Just the group photo, (And the two with no alt text.) Gog the Mild (talk) 15:54, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
Gog the Mild (talk) 12:40, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- There is no consensus that Featured Articles require alt text. See Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates/Alt text. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:14, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- An FA needs to be fully MoS compliant. The MoS states, under MOS:ACCIM: "Images that are not purely decorative should include an alt attribute that acts as a substitute for the image for blind readers, search-spiders, and other non-visual users. If additional alt text is added, it should be succinct or refer the reader to the caption or adjacent text. See WP:ALT for more information." Gog the Mild (talk) 22:31, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- I am aware of what it says, and I am aware of what the consensus is regarding its interpretation, which is that featured articles only need comply with the specified items, and not the full MoS, and that the requirement for alt text was discussed at length, and that there was no consensus for its inclusion. If you want to restore the alt text requirement, you need to start another RfC. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:42, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- @Gog the Mild: FYI, this is the most recent discussion I could find on the topic as it relates to FAC. It doesn't seem like there's any appetite to require alt text in Featured articles. I won't even attempt to summarize all the various positions people have on the issue, but suffice it to say there is healthy disagreement on whether alt text is always desirable, along with the normal meta discussion about how much of the MoS is open to interpretation. In short, no one should have been demanding it in any of your nominations. --Laser brain (talk) 23:23, 24 July 2019 (UTC)
- I am aware of what it says, and I am aware of what the consensus is regarding its interpretation, which is that featured articles only need comply with the specified items, and not the full MoS, and that the requirement for alt text was discussed at length, and that there was no consensus for its inclusion. If you want to restore the alt text requirement, you need to start another RfC. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:42, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- An FA needs to be fully MoS compliant. The MoS states, under MOS:ACCIM: "Images that are not purely decorative should include an alt attribute that acts as a substitute for the image for blind readers, search-spiders, and other non-visual users. If additional alt text is added, it should be succinct or refer the reader to the caption or adjacent text. See WP:ALT for more information." Gog the Mild (talk) 22:31, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
- Closing note: This candidate has been promoted, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. --Laser brain (talk) 00:04, 25 July 2019 (UTC)
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