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- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was promoted by Karanacs 17:48, 9 February 2010 [1].
Golden White-eye[edit]
- Nominator(s): Sabine's Sunbird talk 18:55, 1 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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This article had a very thorough GA nomination round. It's stable and has just about every reference there is on this species. It's shorter than some other bird FAs, reflecting the relative poverty of research species in this part of the world get. Nevertheless I feel it meets the criteria. Sabine's Sunbird talk 18:55, 1 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments (may do a full review later)
Please fix the dab link to Rota- External links all work
Alt text is present, but describing it as just a "small yellow bird" may be a bit too little. Perhaps add some more descriptive alt text?
- Ucucha 19:02, 1 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Link to Rota had been fixed, a bit of lag I feel. With the alt text, I have expanded the alt in the first image, do I have to do it every time? Sabine's Sunbird talk 19:05, 1 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Hello—I would presently
oppose[concerns addressed] based on some problems with the writing:- "Fossil evidence shows [that] the Golden White-eye once also occurred on Tinian and Rota but has subsequently become extirpated in those locations from the impact of human activities."—does fossil evidence show that the species "has subsequently become extirpated", or is this a new thought? I'd recast as "Fossils provide evidence that the Golden White-eye once also occurred on Tinian and Rota, but the species was extirpated in those locations by the impact of human activities."
- "In addition translocations of 50 birds from Saipan to the island of Sarigan, a predator free island reserve, is currently being planned by scientists working to save the species"—"translocations ... is currently being planned"; compound adjectives like "predator free" or "golden coloured [bird]" need hyphens; "in addition" is clumsy without a comma following it
- there are a number of "which"s that need a comma before them ("It is threatened by the invasive brown tree snake which has recently become established on Saipan")
- Some basic proofreading is needed: "The song
thatis a long raspy warble rendered as "séé mé-can you séé mé-I can séé yóú-can you séé mé'"; "where it is shares its range with" - "There is considerable overlap between their foraging range and those of"—grammatical number
- This is a run-on sentence: "Certain tree species are preferred as foraging habitat, for example the common forest tree Cynometra ramifolia is the preferred tree and used more frequently than the equally common Guamia mariannae."
- "On Saipan, the only habitats it is generally absent from are the..." is much nicer as "from which it is generally absent"
- Regards, Outrigger (talk) 04:05, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for your comments, I have tried to address them all. Sabine's Sunbird talk 06:01, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Image review All OK Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:46, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments Jimfbleak - talk to me? 07:02, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- I made some changes, mainly minor stylistic stufF, but please check
- 2,095 birds/km² needs imperial conversion
- Some reference tweaking fr icon, bare url etc, please check
- Um, km² gets converted to... square miles? Acres? Hectares? Sorry, really don't know. Other edits are cool. Sabine's Sunbird talk 07:56, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- I've put 8.47 per acre, round it to 8.5 if you prefer. Or you could use 5427 per sq mile! Jimfbleak - talk to me? 11:20, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Acres is fine. That is an impressive number of birds to cram into an acre. Sabine's Sunbird talk 01:58, 3 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- I've put 8.47 per acre, round it to 8.5 if you prefer. Or you could use 5427 per sq mile! Jimfbleak - talk to me? 11:20, 2 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Support COI declaration. I'm another bird project member, but I hadn't edited this until the FAC tweaks above. Jimfbleak - talk to me? 07:04, 4 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments - sources look okay, links checked out with the link checker tool. Ealdgyth - Talk 19:00, 4 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Support. Appears well-written and comprehensive; my concerns were all resolved and are now moved to the talk. I leave one here for other reviewers to decide for themselves. Ucucha 14:54, 7 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Comments. A good article in general, engagingly and comprehensibly written. I have a few small comments on the text and found a few sources you have not included.- Per WP:TIES, shouldn't this article use American English?
- Mebbe. It's borderline, in my opinion, the ties are there but they don't strike me as being very strong (most islanders seak English but not at home). And since my British English is better than my American English (I tend to use both) I tend to use it, and since I was the first person to expand this in any way yadda yadda yadda. I don't care one way or another, if anyone wants to change it they can do so. Sabine's Sunbird talk 05:51, 6 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Per WP:TIES, shouldn't this article use American English?
Support (moral or otherwise) as WP:Birds member and sometime looker-over of this article. I can't think of anything else to improve. Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:03, 8 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Comments Looks good, just a few comments below. Sasata (talk) 03:25, 9 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Support Looks FAC-quality to these eyes. Sasata (talk) 05:59, 9 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- The following source (Camp, RJ; Pratt, TK; Marshall, AP, et al. (2009). "Recent status and trends of the land bird avifauna on Saipan, Mariana Islands, with emphasis on the endangered Nightingale Reed-warbler Acrocephalus luscinia". Bird Conservation International. 19(4 ):323-337) mentions that since 1982, "the human population on Saipan increased more than four-fold and much of the island has been developed." It also gives birds numbers for surveys conducted in 1982, 96, and 2007 that show decreasing population. Perhaps this info could be worked into the article?
- Bird Conservation International is irritatingly one of the journals I cannot get at my uni. I can certainly, working off the abstract, state that it is declining, but the abstract provides no context, is it precipitous? Sabine's Sunbird talk 03:59, 9 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- "… rendered as ""séé mé-can you séé mé-I can séé yóú-can you séé mé"" what do the accents on the vowels imply?
- I have no idea. I just quoted what the HBW did and attributed it to them. Sabine's Sunbird talk 03:59, 9 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- maybe link breeding pair, forest canopy, understory, predated
- what size are the eggs?
- Done. Sabine's Sunbird talk 03:59, 9 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
- Reference formatting needs a quick copyedit: compare page range in ref#5 (194–95) versus #12 (317-326). Article titles have inconsistent capitalization.
- Fixed I hope. Sabine's Sunbird talk 03:59, 9 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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