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Notability[edit]

I noticed that all of the sources used for this article were published by the UN. Although self-published material like this can be used to verify specific pieces of information about the subject, such sources are generally insufficient for establishing notability. If you intend to keep working on this article, be sure to find external sources--if they exist. If not, the article may be deleted. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 22:27, 7 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The string "Working Group on Children and Armed Conflict" yields nearly 70k results in a Google search, many of which are independent of the working group or the UN (see 1, 2, 3). I think the subject is clearly notable, although the article does not adequately assert its basis for notability in the present form. DickClarkMises (talk) 06:47, 8 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for the inputs. I made a few changes to the text and inserted links outside the UN website. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Mason2011 (talk • contribs) 23:03, 26 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Feedback[edit]

Here's my feedback on the actual content of the article:

Be careful of the tone that is used in the article. Although most readers will agree that the use of children in armed conflicts is a "heinous act", it is inappropriate to describe it as such in an encyclopedia article. Take a look at WP:TONE for a guideline on this issue.
The sentence "Since its inception, there are progresses in this field of particular importance to the international community." should be expanded upon greatly. It is insufficient to say that progress has been made. Instead, explain to the reader what the progress has been.
Everything from the third paragraph onwards ("Negotiation in the context of the United Nations Security Council ...") is completely irrelevant to this topic.
Subtopics that should be addressed in greater detail: the history of the working group, their specific goals, what progress they've made, public opinions on their actions thus far.

Hope this helps! Let me know if you have any questions. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 15:52, 28 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]